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"Such a Pig" (Pig TF)

    Isabel was a young girl at the age of 18. Her features were petite but still very cute. Isabel got wonderful grades and was generally a good person.
     Her only true flaw was that she was very self degrading. She couldn't help but blame herself for any bad luck that came to her. As with many girls Isabel worried about her appearance and what others thought of her.
     Whether it was thinking her hair was a catastrophe or thinking she was fat, it never failed. She killed her self esteem worrying all the time.
      Today was one of these worst days. After freaking out about her hair all morning she finally got in her ford convertible she drove to the mall to shop for a prom dress.
    She arrived entering the south entrance heading toward a large shop that held and showed off many beautiful gowns and dresses. Dresses for weddings, proms or anything else lined the walls.
     She made her way through the shop finally narrowing her choices down to two options. Her first option was a sapphire strapless dress that was reveling but modest at the same time, which appealed to Isabel. Her second dress was a light green dress that was cut low and had all sorts of design patterns of flowers and the like adorning its surface.
     Isabel couldn't make the decision without trying them on. She made her way to the nearby changing room, where she took the farthest stall closest  to the wall. Isabel tried on both dresses finding that she couldn't choose either of them.
     Isabel felt like the sapphire one was to reveling to her lack of a large amount of cleavage. Isabel resented the beautiful summer green dress because it was simply ,in her mind, too beautiful for her.
     Un willing to make a decision Isabel sat on the changing rooms only stall and started sobbing. She cried and cried complaining about how she had no boyfriend and that she looked like such a pig.
   Isabel should have chosen her words more carefully. Words have power, and words mixed with emotions have even more power.
      Unknown to the crying girl she started to change. It started with her ears. Moving to the top of her head and growing large and floppy. Isabel then started to gain weight, as her nose started flattening out.
    Feeling a tingling sensation Isabel instinctively scratched the surface, only finding it to a large flat mound if flesh. Isabel turned to the mirror and screamed. She was huge and her nose and ears... Isabel instantly thought to her earlier words that condemned her fate.
   Isabel's changes continued as her screams and wails turned into pig snorts and grunts. Her feet and hands turned into hooves and her legs and arms shortened. Her body now encompassed by new pink skin, fell to the floor landing on all fours, intending to stay that way. Isabel's short brown hair fell in front of her face landing silently on the ground. Isabel now resembled a pig in every way.
   Isabel was now an animal. A piece of property, and with that Isabel's fate was fully recognized.  
   
Well this is a shorter TF story but ehh, I just needed to upload something. This was a request from.

dragonseeker26.deviantart.com/

I hope this meets your expectations. I'm sorry it took so long.

I'm still accepting requests but a request is a request there is no guarantee.

As always please comment, fave, watch, whatever you feel is appropriate. I love to hear from you guys whether its criticism or just feedback or even ideas!

Yours truly, Centaur1998
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Bunnyhoofs Nov 24, 2013  Student Photographer
Bad things happen to bad people, and Isabel is a good person, so here is my question: Did she suffer a curse or something?

Just asking 
Sweating a little... 
 

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Centaur1998 Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kinda of. She was so self concerned she just changed by fate. The story is kinda supposed to be mysterious!
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and what happened to Elizabeth at the end
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Centaur1998 Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's up for inturpertation!
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Yeah, you weren't kidding Centaur. This is a very short transformation story. The beginning of it turned out pretty well, I think. It establishes what Isabel is and in transformation standards the beginning of it was ideal. It was very short, and very brief. However, it still gives you a good idea as to what the victim is and what she looks like. Also, it gives a good description as to her strengths and weaknesses. In this instance, Isabel was very self-conscious about herself. But, unbeknownst to her, she will become even more self-conscious that now she is a fat pig. However, the transformation process itself could have been a lot better. And I mean that in the most respectful way possible. I was very disappointed with the length of this story. It had potential because of the beginning, but it sadly fell short of expectations. You took shortcuts during the transformation sequence. An example would be, "her hands turned into hooves" this is a very common mistake amongst transformation story tellers. The reader didn't visualize her hands turning into hooves, instead, the reader visualizes her hands poofing into hooves. No metamorphosis, no auditory or visual sensation. Just, poof.

You are very talented writer. I think anyone who reads your stories can see that. And this story is definitely beneath your skill set. The fact that you drew this character so well proves that. I think you might want to revisit this transformation in the near future.

Sincerely, Charlie.
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Centaur1998 Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yah first off thanks for the critic and the comment. I knew that this story was short. I also knew I patterned out a little bit at the end. I've been very busy. It's nice that your critical though. Some other people on this site say it was pretty good. And I like that your truley honest!

:)
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dragonseeker26 Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A bit short, but still enjoyable. Nice job, and thanks for taking my request :)
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Centaur1998 Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks one of my lesser stories though.
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dragonseeker26 Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's still not bad...though the tf did seem rather short/rushed...
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Centaur1998 Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yah well you win some you lose some
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